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Best Bud

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Like flash of light in a dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud
made me really proud.
Until goes away the gloom,
O flower, take your time to bloom.


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The sparkles then becomes a light if you do not take it as light.The stranger then goes straight , if somebody guide right.

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Nice one Rai! :)

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Thank you, Charlyn! :) This one's for my son.

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Best Bud
Like flash of light in a dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To For too many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud
made me really proud.
Until goes away the gloom,
O flower, take your time to bloom.


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Thanks, Emma. But I think, "too" should be "to". :)

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Best Bud
Like a flash of light in a dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud
made me really proud.
Until
away goes away the gloom,
O flower, take your time to bloom.


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Thanks leosmith. I think that correction down there looks better than the original version.

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Best Bud
Like a flash of light in a dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To many, you've caused a fright,
for squeezing in with all your might.
Seeing that little bud
,
made me really proud.
Until
goes you go away , the gloom,
O flower, take your time to bloom.


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Thanks a bunch, Nicholas. :)

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Best Bud
Like a flash of light in on a dark night,
that's how you came into my life.
To many For too long , you've caused a fright , for . For squeezing in with yourself into my life.
With
all your might.
Seeing
that this little bud ,
made me really proud.
Until goes away the gloom
.
Oh
, O flower , take your time to bloom.
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