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French

La Pluie M'appelle

La pluie m'appelle.
Elle murmure à l'aube.
Son mouillure urgente me caresse.
Nous avons partagé un moment éternel
avant de fermer à nouveau mes yeux.

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I used "mouillure" instead of "humidite" though I don't know which one is closer to "moisture." I want to say moisture, not wetness, but humidete is more like humidity.

Also, the third line seems to translate to "its moisture" when what I really want to say is "her moisture." Is there another way to say that?

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La Pluie M'appelle
La pluie m'appelle.
Elle murmure à l'aube.
Son
mouillure urgente bruit et ses gouttes d'eau me caresse.
Nous avons partagé un moment éternel
avant de fermer à nouveau mes yeux.

~~~~~

I used "mouillure" instead of "humidite" though I don't know which one is closer to "moisture." I want to say moisture, not wetness, but humidete is more like humidity.

Also, the third line seems to translate to "its moisture" when what I really want to say is "her moisture." Is there another way to say that?
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