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Brazil agriculture
Brazil has the strongest agropecuary system in the world. It produces a large amount of wheat, soilbean, coffee, oranges, meat, and sugarcane. It stands for 1/4 of GPD (gross domestic product). I am proud of this status because Brazil is a great agricultural country, but, on the other hand, it does not have incentives in other areas, such as technology. Every time I need to buy a smartphone or a smartwatch, I need to import them from China, and the great point that annoys me is that Brazilian current is called real and stands for five times less than dollar commercial. So I need to work five times more in order to acquire these goods.
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Good effort. I just have a few concerns:
1. I've never heard of agropecuary, but the Collins English-Portuguese dictionary translates agropecuária to agriculture or farming.
2. English language is slowly becoming more concise, so I could also write the last two sentences a little better (as it looks clunky to me).
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Corrections
Brazil agriculture
Brazil has the strongest
agropecuary
agricultural
system in the world. It produces a large amount of wheat,
soilbean
soybean
, coffee, oranges, meat, and sugarcane. It stands for 1/4 of
GPD
GDP
(gross domestic product). I am proud of this status because Brazil is a great agricultural country, but, on the other hand, it does not have
incentives
specializations
in other areas, such as technology. Every time I need to buy a smartphone or a smartwatch, I need to import them from China, and
the
great point that
what
annoys me is that
the
Brazilian
current
currency
is called
real
Real
and stands for five times less than
dollar
commercial
the
US Dollar commercially
. So I need to work five times more
in order
to acquire these goods.
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I would write the final part as: Every time I need to buy a smartphone or a smartwatch, I need to import them from China, and what annoys me is that I need to work five times more to acquire these goods since the Brazilian Real is one-fifth of the US Dollar.
You could directly site the exchange rate as:
...one Brazilian Real is worth 0.20 US Dollar (or 20 cents)...
and your readers would still get the idea.
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