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sports

sport is not only important for you your body but also for your mental health . doing sports is a very good habit and you can enjoy doing it . sports is very important to all communities it provides the society with a lot of opportunities to youth and elderly people . all people can benefit from sports businessmen , youth and provides a job for a lot of workers also . you can watch it as entertainment you can practice it yourself . i think when we focus on sports as a business it will take a lot of people to do it instead of drug dealing and alcohol addiction . youth will find a place where they can use all there energy . sports also makes you grow up physically and mentally . it has helped a lot of poor families and people who has talent and strong well .

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Charlyn
Yes, I agree. Sports can help us greatly in boosting our well-being.
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sports
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Nursalyn
sports
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Phillip.Laplana
sports Sports
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Phillip.Laplana
I like this piece. You can tell it was written from free-flowing thought. The writer said what he wanted to say, as naturally as possible. Good chops!
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