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improvements in our shopping centre

To: Trevor John, manager Designer Centre
From: Ana Lopez, designer company employee
Subject: Benicarlo Shopping Centre

INTRODUCTION
This report describes breafly the shoping Centre in Benicarlo, and recommends a few improvements to increase the number of visitants.

THE LOCATION AND DESCRIPTION
The shopping Centre, is located between Benicarlo and Peñiscola. It has the main entrance by 340 road. They are a huge cinemas, a few restaurants, a video games place, a supermarked and a big range of stores.

WHAT IS THE PROBLEM?
Being next to 340road has been the main inconvenient o acceded in it. It is really dangerous to enter in the shopping centre from this road because it is always crowed of cars. The other issue that need to be dealt with is the supermarket. It is not big enought to attract people, and it has the entrance just at the end of a big hall.

IMPROVEMENTS
Due to the difficulty to arribe until there from the main road, if there was a roundabout, costumers would have easy access to do shopping there. I suggest if only the supermarket would be bigger and would had its entrance just next to the parking cars, it would be more attractive to buyers.

CONCLUSION:
If the suggestion that i have done are carried out, the shopping centre will get a great improvement. Especially increasing the number of new stores that would like to take place in this shopping Centre.

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improvements in our shopping centre
To: Trevor John, manager Designer Centre
From: Ana Lopez, designer company employee
Subject: Benicarlo Shopping Centre

INTRODUCTION
This report describes
breafly briefly the shoping shopping Centre in Benicarlo, and recommends a few improvements to increase the number of visitants visitors .

THE LOCATION AND DESCRIPTION
The shopping Centre, is located between Benicarlo and Peñiscola.
It has the The main entrance by is the 340 road. They are a have some huge cinemas, a few restaurants, a video games place, a supermarked supermarket and a big range of other stores.

WHAT IS THE PROBLEM?
Being next to
340road the 340 road has been the main inconvenient o acceded in inconvenience associated with it. It is really very dangerous to enter in the shopping centre from this road because it is always crowed of packed with cars. The other issue that need to be dealt with addressed is the supermarket. It is not big enought enough to attract many people, and it has the entrance just at the end of a big hall.

IMPROVEMENTS
Due to the difficulty to
arribe until getting there from the main road, if there was a roundabout, costumers custumers would have easy easier access to do shopping there. I suggest that if only the supermarket would be bigger and it would had have its entrance just next to the parking cars car park , it would be more attractive to buyers shoppers .

CONCLUSION:
If the suggestion that
i I have done made are carried out, the shopping centre will get see a great improvement. Especially increasing the number of new stores that would like to take place do business in this shopping Centre.
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To: Trevor John, manager of Designer Centre
From: Ana Lopez, designer company employee
Subject: Benicarlo Shopping Centre

INTRODUCTION
This report
briefly describes breafly the shoping shopping Centre in Benicarlo, and recommends a few improvements to increase the number of visitants visitors .

THE LOCATION AND DESCRIPTION
The shopping Centre
, is located between Benicarlo and Peñiscola. It has the The main entrance is by the 340 road. They There are a huge cinemas, a few restaurants, a video games place, a supermarked supermarket and a big large range of stores.

WHAT IS THE PROBLEM?
Being next to
340road the 340 road has been the main inconvenient o acceded in it inconvenience affecting the shopping centre . It is really dangerous to enter in the shopping centre from this road because it is always crowed of packed with cars. The other issue that need needs to be dealt with is the supermarket. It is not big enought enough to attract sufficient quantities of people , and it has the entrance its entrance is just at the end of a big hall.

IMPROVEMENTS
Due to the The difficulty to arribe until there of entering from the main road , would be alleviated if there was a roundabout , costumers . Customers would have easy access to do the shopping centre, leading them to shop there. I suggest that if only the supermarket would be were bigger and would had its entrance just next to the parking cars car park , then it would be more attractive to buyers.

CONCLUSION:
If
the my suggestion that i have done are carried out, the shopping centre is implemented, the shopping centre will be greatly improved. There will get a great improvement. Especially increasing likely be an increase in the number of new stores companies that would like to take place open new stores and do business in this shopping Centre centre .
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improvements in our shopping centre
To: Trevor John, manager of Designer Centre
From: Ana Lopez, designer company employee
Subject: Benicarlo Shopping Centre

INTRODUCTION
This report describes
breafly briefly the shoping shopping Centre in Benicarlo , and recommends a few improvements to increase the number of visitants.

THE LOCATION AND DESCRIPTION
The shopping Centre
, is located between Benicarlo and Peñiscola. It has the main entrance by on 340 road Road . They are a have huge cinemas, a few restaurants, a video games game place, a supermarked supermarket, and a big range large variety of stores.

WHAT IS THE PROBLEM?
Being next to
340road 340 Road has been the main inconvenient o inconvenience to acceded in it. It is really dangerous to enter in the shopping centre center from this road because it is always crowed of crowded with cars. The other issue that need to be dealt with is the supermarket. It is not big enought to attract people, and it has the entrance just at the end of a big hall.

IMPROVEMENTS
Due to the difficulty
to arribe until there of arriving from the main road, if there was a roundabout, costumers customers would have easy easier access to do their shopping there . I suggest if only the supermarket would be bigger and would had have its entrance just next to the parking cars, it would be more attractive to buyers the customers .

CONCLUSION:
If the
suggestion suggestions that i I have done given are carried out, the shopping centre center will get a great improvement greatly improve . Especially by increasing the number of new stores that would like to take place in move into this shopping Centre centre .
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