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Tropical holiday

It's sunny and hot, there's a holiday, so everybody is heading to the beach. It's Friday, 5pm, and the roads are already jammed. The trip that normally takes 1 hour, now takes 3. I'm impatient, sweating a lot, and asking myself why I insist on travelling in these occasions. I'm also worried because there's always someone feeling entitled to let their anger out, threatening the others' lives on the road. I'm listening to reggae, and it's an imense contradiction to my true feelings at the moment.
I finally arrive and feel relieved - "it's worth it!"
The following day I start the preparations - rituals trully: sun lotion for the body and the face, hair lotion, bikini, a hat, sun glasses. I step the sand and look for a spot far from the crowd. There's no such thing. So I change the paremeters to calm crowd. I see a girl reading a book. That's my place!
The sun is tough, but I have my parasol. I lay down with the body to be tanned and the face under the shadow. Perfect!
10 minutes. A bunch of teenagers settle just next to me with a stereo. I hate their music!

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Tropical holiday
It's sunny and hot, there's a holiday, so everybody is heading to the beach. It's Friday, 5pm, and the roads are already jammed. The A trip that normally takes 1 hour, now takes 3. I'm impatient, sweating a lot, and asking myself why I insist on travelling in on these occasions. I'm also worried because there's always someone feeling who feels entitled to let their anger out, threatening the others' lives on the road. I'm listening to reggae, and it's an imense immense contradiction to my true feelings at the moment.
I finally arrive and feel relieved - "it's worth it!"
The following day I start the preparations -
actually, rituals trully : sun lotion for the body and the face, hair lotion, bikini, a hat, sun glasses. I step onto the sand and look for a spot far from the crowd. There's no such thing. So I change the paremeters parameters to calm find a crowd that is at least quiet . I see a girl reading a book. That's my place!
The sun is
tough strong , but I have my parasol. I lay lie down with the so that my body to be can get tanned and the while my face under is in the shadow shade . Perfect!
10 minutes. A bunch of teenagers
settle settles just next to me with a stereo. I hate their music!
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